T2+Narrative

__Wednesday 13th July 2011__ Narrative writing. A Day At The Beach.

Standing by the tent it was a beautiful morning in Murray’s Bay but mother nature had a different idea. My long sandy blond hair, platted neatly behind me, poking out of my cap. Through my dark Hey Oi sun glasses I could see it was going to get wet.

Pushing our boats into the water I took a deep breath and climbed into my boat. Pulling the main sheet our sails filled and we took off sailing towards the course. At the start line the committee yelled “ 5..4...3...2...1 GO!!” A huge bullet of wind came and T.y.p.b.c was in the lead. First race over we sailed to our meeting area we held tightly to Jimmy Gilpin ( patrol boat) sails flapping fiercely in the wind. “ Ok guys we need to keep left, pin end please, remember to hike and push your shoulders out” Dad yelled at the top of his voice, trying to be heard over the noise of our sails. “And keep your head in the game eye on the prize” dad added. “HONK” went the horn from the committee boat. I quickly pulled on my sprit and took off. “3...2...1..Go” Yelled the lady on the committee for the second time. “HONK” “Someones over the line” I thought then i realized it was me. I quickly gybed around the mark and set off again. Almost there and heard a huge bang and a poll coming down straight for my head. It was my sprit it had fallen down. All the boats passed me. “Darn it” I thought working quickly  to get my sprit back in the rope loop and carry on down wind. The wind is getting heavier and my boat is getting unstable. “No No NO” I knew it I watched the news last night and it said 12:00PM, 30 knots plus of wind, I looked at my start watch it said 11:59. I made my way to the bottom mark. I was in the lead again because everyone else had capsized. Then the worst came.

Coming round the bottom mark it was a gybe. I ducked the boom but I didn’t get to the other side quick enough my boat starts to tip over. I scramble to the high side, but It was to late. I fell into the ice water. I swam around to the back of the boat, gripping onto the center board with my saturated blue fingers. After a cold struggle to get my boat up I clambered into my boat. I grabbed the bailers and started bailing fast I threw the water out of my boat back into the ocean. For the second time I heaved my main sheet in and took off like a rocket. Catching up to my friends. Speeding past them I yelled “Pull your main sheet in” they did as they were told and we sailed up to the group and dodged all the capsized boats, It was like a maze game. We finally made it to the finish line. The committee put up the go home flag. We made our way to shore. When we got near to shore the waves were as big as me or taller I was 1.59 meters tall.  “there must be a 2.5 meter swell” I thought to my self. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">As we came closer to shore we pulled up are center boards and took off are rudders and floated the rest of the way in to the beach. We jumped out of are boats held the front dangling in the icy water.We waited for a adult to help us lift our boats up and out of the breaking waves, risking submersion and onto our trailers.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I stared through mums binoculars and saw all the boats just finishing. As we washed our boats I said <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ We should go check the racing results.” <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Year we should” they replied <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> “I Bet we did really well in those races” Tom blurted out <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Year I bet we did” Sophie said in her quiet toned voice. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Finally we finished derigging our boats, other boats were starting to come in now.We briskly walked down to the results, they read: Race one: 1st Elly ,Windward 2nd Matthew Halyard ,3rd Tom Sands, 5 Th. Holy Greg’s, 6 Th. Sophie Greg’s. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“We took the title off the Aussies. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Can’t wait till prize giving.” I pointed out to my B.F.F’S. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Yeah, Tauranga is taking home the trophy” Tom Yelled. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Keep it down” Sophie says

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">About an hour later it was prize giving there were prizes for the top 10 and spot prizes. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Spot prizes first. They went through a lot of random people and numbers then they called me. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“3945 Elly Windward” they called form the microphone. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Awesome, a Roster life jacket and a pair of Dirty Dog sun glasses!” I thought as I walked to the stage. All of T.y.p.b.c got a spot prize. Now come the results. This has been the best regatta ever. The Tauranga team (T.y.p.bc) brought the national trophy home back in its rightful place. To greet us on the stage was Dean Barker got him to sign my buoyancy aid. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“We are shaw to get noticed at the club, right” Sophie asked <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> “ Yeah and they will probably be looking out for us to compete in the worlds” I replied. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Really worlds” Tom asked <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ I know its hard to believe” Holly exclaimed.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Back at the club we did get noticed by almost everyone even the clubs best sailor Gary Smith. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ hello boys and girls plus shark bait( his nickame for me) how are you?” Gary asked <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Good thanks” we told him. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Its good that I found you I wanted to tell you that you have bean selected for the WORLDS!!” <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ WOW really the worlds” Sophie looked gobsmacked <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Yes from now on I will see you down at the club every day of the week a part from Saturday and Wednesday at 4:00 PM on the dot ok ?” He instructed us <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Ok “ We replied <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Starting today go get your boats and get on the water” He told us and walked over to the patrol boats. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“ Lets Go” I yelled as we ran to our boats ready. The water was sparkling from the sun light, the blue sky making a <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">lovely <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> light blue colour on the water. We were ready for another lovely day on the water sailing down at the beach hanging out with my B.F.F’S.

__Tuesday 21st June 2011.__ Dialogue E.G- From the rimu novel.

__This example is from when the old man tells them to get in the cave to safety.__

“ Who are you?” Kobey asked the rugged old man. “ Yeah who are you and what are you trying to do to us?” lila asked with a scared look on her face. “No time to tell you” Announced the man. “ Hurry up and get in the cave you’ll be safe in there” The man instructed us. “But But” we argued “No question asked get in!” He yelled.












 * __Monday 20th June__**


 * __WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing__**

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind

being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea. 1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest. 2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers. 3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us. 4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.
 * Name: ___** **Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is
 * 1) The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

What is being personified? 1: __Wind__ Which human trait or quality is given? 1: Whispered. What is being personified? 2: Happy Which human trait or quality is given? 2: Flowers. What is being personified? 3: Sun Which human trait or quality is given? 3: Beat What is being personified? 4: Time Which human trait or quality is given? 4:Crawled What is being personified? 5: Chainsaw Which human trait or quality is given? 5: Sang
 * Personification Worksheet**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.

6. When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her. What is being personified? Shoes Which human trait or quality is given? Singing 7. When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains. 8. As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly. 9. Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable. 10. William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.

What is being personified? 7: Freedom Which human trait or quality is given? Rang What is being personified? 8:pencil Which human trait or quality is given? Walked What is being personified? 9: ? Which human trait or quality is given? ? What is being personified? 10: William Which human trait or quality is given? Wished.

being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea. 2. As Shelia walked home from school, the wind gripped her in its frigid fingertips. 3. Alan found that his wife had left him, and he felt that joy would never visit his home again. 4. The engine hacked and coughed as Kevin turned the key, but the old car wouldn’t start. 5. Though Dante tried to live a pious life and be a good father, the streets called to him at night. What is being personified? 1- Water Which human trait or quality is given? Sad What is being personified? 2- Wind Which human trait or quality is given? gripped What is being personified? 3- Alan Which human trait or quality is given? joy What is being personified? 4-Engine Which human trait or quality is given? coughed and hacked What is being personified? streets Which human trait or quality is given? call 6. The night was calm and still as crickets chirped and owls hooted under the light of the moon. What is being personified? Night Which human trait or quality is given? Calm 7. Though it’s been said that “Diamonds are a girl’s best friend,” some girls prefer chocolate. 8. Little Vito was attempting to sneak out of his parent’s house to cause trouble late at night. He was tiptoeing across the kitchen floor toward the backdoor the creaky floor boards and his squeaky shoes told his parents he was leaving. Big Vito was none too pleased with little Vito. 9. Gina was the most beautiful girl in the whole town. Her eyes were a blanket of stars. Her teeth shined like fresh porcelain tiles. Her long vivacious hair enjoyed many beautiful adventures as it traveled down the course of her shoulder blades. But the true source of her beauty was her personality: Gina made the world a better place by being a good person. 10. Victor was walking home from his friend Paco’s house late at night when he heard a tree branch breaking deep in the forest. His heart beat rapidly as he wondered what could have made that noise. Was it an animal? Was it a man? Was it something else? Victor knew that the forest would keep its many secrets as he would not be investigating tonight. Victor ran all the way home. What is being personified? ___ Which human trait or quality is given?__ What is being personified? ___ Which human trait or quality is given?__ What is being personified? ___ Which human trait or quality is given?__ What is being personified? ___ Which human trait or quality is given?__
 * Name: ___** **Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is
 * 1) The sad waters of the icy wasteland streamed through barren landscape.
 * Personification Worksheet 2**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.

Thursday 14th June 2011 W.a.l.t: use are senses to help us describe in our writing. __<span style="color: #0000ff; font-family: Georgia,serif;">S.C We can describe what our marshmallow feels like, tastes like, Looks like and smells like. __ __ ﻿ __SEE __The marshmallow is the color of a fluffy cloud in the deep blue sky. The icing sugar spills over the top like snow on Mt Ruapehu. The small marshmallow the size of a thumb.__ SMELL __My Marshmallow is as sweet as candy that have just come out of the packet. It smells like a sweet from candy land.__ Touch __My marshmallow feels hard but squishy just like a pillow__ Taste __The marshmallow melts in your mouth like sweet water osing out of a object__

Thursday 9th June 2011

W.a.l.t- Identify and use alliteration in our writing. __ ﻿S.C. __ __ ﻿.We can identify alliteration __ __ .We create examples using alliteration in text. __

__**B.** Big beautiful buzzy bees buzz though the beautiful bulb fields stinging bulls.__ __**C.**Crazy carrots playing cards with cows while the birds crow.__ __**D.**Dancing Dana dances over a Dutch city and dancing down drains as the city dry clean there dirty clothes listening to the drum beat.__ __**F.** Fred makes fresh fish fritters from fish and puts his fresh fish fritters in a frame.__ __**G.**Greg makes garlic gardens getting garlic by the gallon__ __**H.**__ __**j.**__ __**k**__ __**l**__ __**m**__ __**n**__ __**p**__ __**q**__ __**r**__ __**s**__ __**t**__ __**v**__ __**w**__ __**x**__ __**y**__ __**z**__

Wednesday 8th June 2011

__ W.A.L.T- __identify similes and metaphors

__ S.C. - We can identify the similes which use 'as' __ __ We can identify the similes which use 'like' __ __ We can identify metaphors __ __ We can explain what the similes and metaphors mean/are telling us about what we are reading __ __//Metaphors//__

__//1//__

__//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In__

__the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor.__

__What do we mean when we say these things:__

__When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that__

When they eat messily

__When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that__

Someone looks pretty or they do something good

__If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that__That they are tall.

__When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really mean__

They are ugly.

__When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, we really mean that__

Tricky and sneaky.

__If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that__Angry__.__

__When we say somebody is //bright// we mean that__

Smart__.

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could

say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

She is tall

She is kind

She is fast

He is slow

He is smart

he is fat

She is sneaky

He is angry

She is beautiful

He is ugly

He is stubborn

She is short

She is thin

He is silly

He is scared easily

He is a giant. She is an angel.

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