T1+Writing

Persuasive argument for why come and see b.o.p? __**Tuesday 4th April 2011**__ WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.

Success Criteria My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion I will state and restate my opinion I use a range of language resources and punctuation My paragraphs follow the S E E structure

Why wold you spend a lot of money going on a cruse to england on something and stay two nights where you could come to the Bay of Plenty where you can stay longer for a cheeper price? Bay of plenty has a lot to offer, Bay of plenty has lots of beautiful places, Bay of plenty has really nice wether.Put your self out there and get involved in the bay of plenty. Why not come visit bay of plenty now!

Bay of plenty really lives up to its name. You should come here and check out our thousands of things there are to do here like Mclarns falls, A maze me, Blow carts, Kiwi 360, Diving, lazing on the beach enjoying the sun, Camping, Tramping, horses treking and much much more. You and your family wouldn't resist not coming once they see whats on offer in the bay of plenty.

Why spend your winter days in harsh cold wether? Why not spend you time warm in Bay of plenty? Nice Warm summers and perfect winters no snow so its not to cold. On the hot beaches and nice cooling water when it gets to hot we don’t have very meany jelly fish! cold on the snowy mountains.The wether is so nice you will never want to leave our beautiful country!

We have so much to offer you with from Flash Hotels like the Sebel or low key motels.You can also choose to go back packing because we have a lot of backpackers loges. Have fun in all our shops like bay fair or a nice cafe like Zaggers you may even want a bar or a restaurants like the lone star and Zations. We have a lot of different cultured catering options like Chinese, Mexican and Japanese.You have to try it NOW!

Come on you Have to come visit our Bay of plenty.Do it now or it will never get done!We don’t have tropical fish but we have lodes of other fish that you can catch and eat. Com on guys we have nice wether we have lodes of attractions and we have nice hotels, motels, beaches, cafes, bars,restaurants and backpackers. <span style="font: normal normal normal 13px/normal Arial; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">Come and visit the Bay of plenty!

<span style="color: #0007ff; font-family: 'Arial Black',Gadget,sans-serif; font: normal normal normal 13px/normal Arial; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;">Excellent introduction Elly. It states your main points and uses excellent persuasive language features. Excellent use of rhetorical questions. You make some very valid points but you need some more detail in your middle paragraphs. Try to keep your language strong and persuasive throughout the entire piece of writing! Your conclusion needs to be stronger and really must persuade me though. An excellent effort, Elly, you are making fantastic progress with your writing. Keep it up! <span style="color: #0007ff; font-family: 'Arial Black',Gadget,sans-serif; font: normal normal normal 13px/normal Arial; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-top: 0px;"> Miss Crone :)